Good writing. Directing is well done too.
Only thing that bugs me, is the drawing over footage. I always thought of animation as a tool you use when you can't get it to work right in live action. But what I'm watching is live action most of the time, which sort of makes me ask, "why not use the film as a visual tool, and exxagerate the style in the animation?" But overall, we can see the filmmaker in you. Well done.